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My Poem
May 26, 2006 12:52:39 GMT -5
Post by xxmissybxx on May 26, 2006 12:52:39 GMT -5
here is my poem plz tell me wot u think of it.
in my dreams, i am walking you to the door, watching you leave, but as the terror surges through me, i am unable to move, unable to breath, unableto see
my brain is trying to register, i can feel it overloading, i need a button labelled delete, to erase these memory's, that are now flashing through my mind, i just want to forget, i just want to break free
i can see myself fumbling throught the darkness, your insults flying at me, lighting up this harsh world, a world where war is just a normal thing, where pain and grief overpowers happiness, where all we feel is sadness
sadness is the norm, happiness never comes, this is a place where terror is always there, lurking in the background, waiting to strike, this is a place where the fear never ends, where you aren't able to escape, i just want to break free
plz tell me what u think!! i am entering this in to an compotition
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My Poem
May 26, 2006 20:35:42 GMT -5
Post by H a n n a • ○ ○ • on May 26, 2006 20:35:42 GMT -5
it's very profound. But what exactly is it about? also there are a few spelling and grammar mistakes you may want to fix b4 it goes in the comp.
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My Poem
May 27, 2006 12:15:16 GMT -5
Post by xxmissybxx on May 27, 2006 12:15:16 GMT -5
i dunno what it is about, becuz sum tyms after school i walk lolly 2 da door n i was finkin of dat n then the poem came, lol. o yh i need to check out the spellin mistakes as well
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My Poem
May 27, 2006 12:46:00 GMT -5
Post by H a n n a • ○ ○ • on May 27, 2006 12:46:00 GMT -5
Yeah, cool!
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My Poem
Nov 23, 2006 16:59:11 GMT -5
Post by xxmissybxx on Nov 23, 2006 16:59:11 GMT -5
i just thought you should know, i entered it into the competition, and its being published into a book!! yay me
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My Poem
Nov 23, 2006 17:22:23 GMT -5
Post by H a n n a • ○ ○ • on Nov 23, 2006 17:22:23 GMT -5
wow that's great! did you win, or do all the poems go in the book?
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My Poem
Apr 27, 2008 6:52:07 GMT -5
Post by coralie on Apr 27, 2008 6:52:07 GMT -5
^^ is it the away with words yorkshire verses??
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